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From: Mark@mail.uk
To: Russian_friend@oge.ru
Subject: Pocket money
… I saved some of my pocket money and have bought a new computer game. I’m glad that I didn’t have to ask my parents to buy it for me. It would be great to find a job next summer.
… How do you get your pocket money? What do Russian teenagers usually buy with their pocket money? Would you like to get a summer job, and why yes or no? …
Dear Mark,
Thank you for your recent e-mail. I was very glad to hear from you.
I your e-mail you asked me about pocket money. Well, my parents give me pocket money to buy something what I want. I think, Russian teenagers usually buy various toys and computer games with their pocket money. But some teenagers safe their pocket money to buy something special. Personally, I d like to get a summer job for example as an assistant in a store. It s a good chance to earn my own pocket money.
Write back me soon, please.
Best wishes,
Dmitry