Can you check my composition in English about the poor and needy Thank you in advance
Poverty is an issue for every country and society. According to the report of the United Nations, there are over one billion people live from hand to mouth.
Every country tries to solve the problems with the poverty in its own way. Some are quite successful in their fight with poverty while others hardly manage with it.
In my opinion, the reason for poverty is corruption which is widespread in many developing countries and infringement of fundamental democratic principles.
In actual fact, only developed rich countries, where level of corruption is low and democracy is highly developed, successfully cope with poverty. As for developing countries, where people who wield political power often chose to misapply and abuse it, the standard of living leaves much to be desired and as a result most population live in abject poverty.
In my view, there are some ways of helping the need to overcome the poverty. First of all, more volunteer projects, which are engaged in collecting money, clothes and food for the needy, must be launched. Secondly, more attention must be drawn to development of democracy and uprooting of corruption the developing countries.
To sum up, I want to underline that only developed countries with healthy economy and highly developed democratic values do utmost to support people when they go through difficult time in their lives and in this way they struggle with poverty in their societies.
As for developing countries, their governments should effectively struggle with corruption in order beat poverty in their societies.
Poverty is an issue for./in every country and society. According to (a UN report)the report of the United Nations, there are over one billion people WHO live from hand to mouth (over one bn live...)
Every country tries to solve the problems with the poverty in its own way. Some are quite successful in their EFFORT TO ADRESS THE poverty ISSUE while others hardly manage/cope with it.
In my opinion, the reason for poverty is corruption which is widespread in many developing countries and infringement of fundamental democratic principles.
In actual fact, only THE developed rich countries, where THE level of corruption is low and democracy is highly developed, successfully cope with poverty. As for developing countries, where people who wield political power often chose to misapply and abuse it, the standard of living leaves much to be desired and as a result most population live in abject poverty.
In my view, there are ways TO help the needY to overcome (the)poverty. First of all, more volunteer projects engaged in collecting money, clothes and food for the needy must/SHOULD be launched. Secondly, more attention must be drawn to THE development of democracy and uprooting (of) corruption IN the developing countries.
To sum up/to summarize, I wan/I'd like to underline/stress that IT IS only THE developed countries with A healthy economy/healthy economies and developed democratic values do THE utmost to support people/their less fortunate citizens when they go through A difficult time in their lives and in this way they HELP OVERCOME poverty in their societies.
As for developing countries, their governments should effectively TACKLE corruption in order TO BRING DOWN poverty in their societies.
Вполне достойно.
Совет: избегать "боевитых слов" вроде fight, struggle, beat. Каждое из них имеет право на существование, но употребляемые часто и во множестве, они напоминают советские пропагандистские клише. Бороться - это скорее control, чем fight.
he root reason for poverty stem from corruption which is widespread in many developing countries and infringement of fundamental democratic principles.
can i write it in this way?