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Our life is full of adventures, exciting events and pleasant moments. But I am sure, everybody keeps in the memory some moments that were the best in your life. Now I want to tell you about the day that I still remember.
It was my birthday. My parents and friends were greeting me and i received many presents. But there was another surprise that day. In the evening when sky was studded with stars my father asked me to close my eyes, and then led me somewhere. When I opened my eyes I found myself on the roof of building whith a wonderful evening view on Kiev in front of me. In the evening lights the city seemed really magestic. I felt that I lived in the clouds and I am a part of the city.
This day was the best day in my life, because I understood that the world was wonderful and mighty. Appreciate every minute, every moment of our life!